The Shrinking

Suddenly, it looked as if the Johnson household was expanding around them, or maybe not, maybe they were shrinking.  In a flash, the piece of broccoli, which was emerald green, changed from an everyday vegetable into a colossal towering tree.  As they sat under the tree paralyzed in disbelief they heard a THUMP! THUMP! “What was that?” screamed Jonathon and Sarah. It was the Johnson’s rather chubby cat jumping onto the table; the Johnson’s rather chubby, hungry cat.


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The Shrinking — 2 Comments

  1. Hi Billy,
    Really liked the story line, good use of commas. I liked that you emphasised that the cat was hungry. Next time you could add more description.

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