The Mischievous Kitten

Today me and my sister are going to the pet store to buy a cute, fluffy kitten. I want to name it Sparkle but my sister wants to name it Ginger, its really enoying! I’ve always wanted a cat but if its called Ginger then I will be upset. “Lottie you have to go to school and when your back we can go to the pet shop,”shouted mum. Yay, I can’t wait, ( this is the best day ever!)

Six hours later, I was at the counter paying for my precouis cat, he is so cute. We are back in the car and we are going home. “I wondered what was behind the door”Said the cat.


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The Mischievous Kitten — 1 Comment

  1. Hi Charlie,
    This is a really nice piece, a great use of the prompt! This week’s prompt is a phrase which evokes a mystery, ‘I wondered what was behind the door.’ Bringing visual effect to the words, you describe a setting which follows a character in a domestic setting. By setting out the plot early in the piece, a domestic setting, you create a structure which gives the piece stability and puts the reader in the centre of the action. Using this makes the reader feel attached to the piece, and makes them more engaged. This makes the piece interesting right from the start. The theme of buying a pet is one that many will be familiar with, even in their own personal lives, as most people will have experienced either buying a pet themselves with their family, or knowing of people in their family of friendship groups who have bought a pet at some point in their lives. This makes it very relatable to the reader. This makes the reader imagine such a visual description of the setting as a whole. I can relate to this too as I have enjoyed being a pet owner, while it is a lot of responsibility it really does give you companionship like no other! By explaining clearly the atmosphere, that the character was with their sister, you engage with the reader and add to the setting. You use imagery which fits perfectly with the setting. Bringing in specific information like the fact that the character wanted a kitten, demonstrates great imagination. This puts the reader in the front of the story, and this really makes you focus on the piece. Emphasis on the nature of the kitten, being all cute and fluffy, gives a really cute image off to the reader and fully fleshes out your point making it very apparent for the reader. The piece continues to develop, as we hear that the character disagrees with their sister over what they want to name the kitten. This is fairly realistic as many a time family members disagree about naming pets, it is often resolved by a sensible bit of compromise. The of the sheer excitement of bringing the cat into their home, and it actually using the prompt on entrance of their new home, is a really creative use of the prompt and finishes the prompt on a sweet note. Good use of grammar and punctuation too, especially your use of exclamation marks. Keep up the good work!

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