The Broccoli Tree

Slowly, Milly and her mum walked to the broccoli tree that had a swing on it, her mum loved broccoli trees but Milly hated them but this one she liked more as it had a swing on it.  As Milly started to swing on the tree she wondered who it was that built it because she had never seen anything like it…  CRASH!  The broccoli branch on the tree snapped.  Her mum ran over to see her daughter laying on the floor feeling miserable.


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The Broccoli Tree — 2 Comments

  1. Hi Talia,
    Really liked your use of the ellipses. Next time try to include more pauses in your sentences. Also next time, try to put in more punctuation.

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