My Hundred word Challenge

As I walked into the house of peril(I didn’t know it was the house peril)I slowly began to get terrified because I could hear people walking around upstairs and nobody was allowed up there not even  the staff! I was worrying that it was the man in the wall ,he would walk through the wall every hour and come to eat any people that were in the castle. Most people how went in there never came out. I suddenly thought that will I come out alive? I suddenly needed to go and see what was going on. I went up …..


My Hundred word Challenge — 1 Comment

  1. A really nice narrative piece. The mystery description is brilliant, and the ending leaves a lot of mystery around what will happen when the character goes upstairs. Good use of grammar and punctuation, particularly your use of brackets and question marks. The ellipsis is really well placed too. Perhaps add some more descriptive language to extend the piece. Keep up the good work!

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