A Day At The Demolition Site

I trundled through the demolition site. Then I noticed a figure pondering precariously on the edge of a near-by building. But how did he get up there? I had never ventured this far into the site, so I had never seen the building before.

“AHHHHHHHHH'” an ear-bleeding scream punctuated the musty air. The man was falling…and was falling fast. I did not know what to do, I could not save him but I could brake his fall. I grabbed a near by mattress and slammed beneath him. Would it work? I could not find out because then he hit the ground….



A Day At The Demolition Site — 1 Comment

  1. I like your first word ‘trundled’ and a good use of aliteration on the second line. Alot of good punctuation in the right place. Check your phrasing for complete sense.

    You had a very good story plot too.

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